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Not Important - 1728737597
This shit's throwing all kinds of mixed signals. I can't tell what the author's thinking at all. But I can tell this will likely get an axe.
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Plot building is falling into a strange world, being given talismen & weapons, told you're the chosen one, and filling out the world by setting out on the quest. This is just a power fantasy with slower steps. Nothing complex about it at all, not even the mechanics.
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Life's too short to care. The important thing is that everyone knows he don't wanna be saved.
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I'm more bemused you even cared enough to run the string this long. Fly straight & true dude.
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No, I simply got better to focus on than your one comment you're using as an excuse to be capt. save-a-ho.
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>ctrl+f
>"hot"
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>"lucky"
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https://i.postimg.cc/HLN34dJn/i.jpg
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https://i.postimg.cc/KzryKJGF/i.png

Exactly where do you think we are?
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Just so you know, everything you said here does not apply to commercial fiction.
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Not Important - 1728260136
And like that, the joke's worn its welcome out.
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There's another tale where a boy on the verge of suicide from his depression, lack of confidence, & isolation, managed to get his way into killing thieves, raiding dungeons, buying a slave, then plowing her every single night. Then gained a dwarf waifu to increase that to threesomes.

Sometimes, stupid is just stupid.
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He also isn't getting any despite blowing that much money. So yeah, dumb.
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It ain't lolicon
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Think that's bad? Check out 53194.
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Not Important pigeon - 1727403618
Respect the hustle but you'll have to wait

https://i.postimg.cc/T3C0BK5g/i.jpg
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Plot-wise, yes. It's the writer's fault for taking their act 2 and setting it up in such a way that it's a grand conclusion that closed off almost every other thread. With a theme like revenge and the setting being so personable (man vs a group of 3), a laser-like focus is preferable to a grand narrative suited more for war dramas than a story like this. We started very well with Freiya being turned, and that leading to the downfall of another key player as well as a few minor oppositions on the side. However, you can almost smell the image of the primary editor laying their clammy hands on the author's shoulders and whispering the sickening words most readers (rightfully) hate them for:

"The profits are good. Pace this out."

Bullet should not be alive. He shouldn't be some renown super spy master. He shouldn't even have considerable resistance to the embryo that fell almost everyone else who got corrupted. But because this is being dragged out, now the audience is without considerable investments and just wants this obvious short story to wrap up. Yet here we go, full-fledged into another kingdom that has not been remotely important until now, thanks to skills from Bullet that were injected into his ass last-minute by a fourth wall syringe, while the smoldering ashes of the main plot have satisfactorily burnt around him. There's nothing else to wish for. It's not like he's a complicated villain—he's a butt-busting rapist with a shouta fetish.

Both LN author and mangaka needed to have wrapped this all up, taken a vacation, then started on their next story last year.
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Not Important - 1726871586
Can't he regrow her heart? Again with a false sense of urgency. Story's getting sloppy.
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Not Important - 1726870661
Pretty sure this is a super-big hole in plot. Dude can read the memory of a corpse not even ten minutes cold (ie zero brain activity). And has to structurally-understand every single target he "heals", be it recovery, corruption, heal, or upgrade. So why, then, did the mangaka think it's a smart idea to have us believe Kieyaru WOULDN'T know the culprit behind the whole plot from the Axe Hero's memories?

Same Stupid Ball moment happened not five chapters ago with him fighting Hakuou—he wouldn't need Jade Eyes if Heal would show him the who, the what, the where, and the when, all at once. That's a big damn oversight.
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Not Important - 1726869349
"This is actually kind of heartwarming—oh. Well. Guess rabbits gonna rabbit."
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